Sample Polished Draft

 

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As you can see, this is a sample essay that shows you what a 1236-word essay, that includes citations of outside sources, should look like. The title is nonsense and most of this essay is, too. But it has a purpose. After you read these first three paragraphs, you may stop reading. Instead, look at how the essay appears. It shows you how long a 1200+ word essay is. It shows you the margins, which should be one-inch on the left, the right, the top, and the bottoms of every page. It shows you double spacing, font size (12) and acceptable type (Calibri, Times New Roman), and indented paragraphs. It shows you that the paragraphs are indented, yet they do not have extra spaces after each paragraph. It shows you what should appear in the header space (your last name and the page number) and what should appear on the first page of your essay in the left hand corner (your name, your instructor’s name, the name of your class, and the date you wrote the essay). It shows you that the title is capitalized and is placed in the center. You must also format your first and final drafts in this way. The double spacing leaves enough room to write comments and make changes.

This sample essay shows you that your reference page must be set up in a certain way.  The title of the reference page is centered, but the citations are not centered. The citations are set up in a format called “hanging indent.” You must also format your reference page. On the reference page, you should notice that they are alphabetized. When you write a reference page in MLA format, you will call it a Works Cited page. The citations on that page are related to what is inside the essay. The next paragraph will discuss the relationship between what is inside the paper and what is at the end. Please read it when you are writing and revising drafts that use outside sources.

The citations at the end, in the reference page, are related to the citations made in-text. In-text citations always refer to the source in which the author (you or me, or in this case, Lorem Ipsum) got the information that the author is using as a direct quote or a paraphrase. If the source is used as a direct quote to provide evidence, the in-text citation often looks like this: According to at least one study, college students are “are more than twice as likely as employers to think that [they] are being well-prepared” for what is needed in the workforce (Gowdy). If the source is used as a paraphrase, you must still cite it in-text. If you cite a paraphrase, it can look like this: According to at least one study, employers do not find that college students are as well-prepared for the workplace as college students consider themselves to be (Gowdy). In both of the previous examples, the Gowdy mentioned in parentheses indicates that Gowdy is the author of the source that the information came from. Gowdy did not necessarily state that “college students…” but the source he or she used did state that. The sentences might then look like this: In both of these examples, the in-text citations direct the reader (your audience) to the source where the information can be found. If you turn directly to page 6, you will see a citation reference to Gowdy.

 The rest of this text is utter nonsense. It is here just to be a placeholder. If you want to see a sample Works Cited page in MLA 8 format, go to page 6. Morbi in lorem ac diam vulputate aliquam pulvinar vitae lacus. Duis odio magna, elementum vitae ex et, sagittis finibus lectus. Fusce elementum, ex vitae ullamcorper tincidunt, magna velit varius turpis, non interdum nibh ligula et libero. Phasellus placerat leo quam, pellentesque molestie augue sagittis nec. Vestibulum massa dolor, accumsan eu lorem iaculis, suscipit viverra nulla. Nullam aliquet tellus nec ante ullamcorper aliquet. Sed varius eros vel mattis fermentum.

Donec vehicula, diam nec faucibus finibus, magna metus pellentesque eros, sed aliquam ex justo vel augue. Nulla sed aliquam turpis, eu vestibulum tellus. Pellentesque accumsan tincidunt venenatis. Nam tempus mi vel condimentum congue. Praesent eu ante vehicula, feugiat odio sit amet, malesuada enim. Interdum et malesuada fames ac ante ipsum primis in faucibus. Pellentesque sed luctus massa. Praesent varius interdum vestibulum. Proin in diam a massa semper tincidunt at nec odio. In eget metus libero. Ut mi ex, molestie vel nisl nec, sagittis sollicitudin leo.

Morbi in lorem ac diam vulputate aliquam pulvinar vitae lacus. Duis odio magna, elementum vitae ex et, sagittis finibus lectus. Fusce elementum, ex vitae ullamcorper tincidunt, magna velit varius turpis, non interdum nibh ligula et libero. Phasellus placerat leo quam, pellentesque molestie augue sagittis nec. Vestibulum massa dolor, accumsan eu lorem iaculis, suscipit viverra nulla. Nullam aliquet tellus nec ante ullamcorper aliquet. Sed varius eros vel mattis fermentum. Donec vehicula, diam nec.

Mauris volutpat vulputate nibh, vel blandit metus pharetra eu. Duis dignissim metus vel sagittis porta. Praesent aliquam urna ut nisl vestibulum commodo. Nulla tempus fermentum arcu, in bibendum nibh tempus quis. Phasellus finibus bibendum semper. Aenean eget felis rhoncus, pharetra orci eget, viverra mauris. Cras nisi elit, gravida nec nisi et, maximus varius dolor. Nam auctor sapien sed diam facilisis, nec sollicitudin erat maximus. Praesent hendrerit, ante non commodo varius, turpis neque rutrum odio, facilisis tincidunt augue nisi vel ipsum. Integer pellentesque massa et auctor euismod. Mauris eros orci, luctus pulvinar turpis in, ornare eleifend ligula. Mauris euismod congue ante, vel gravida est efficitur nec. Ut sit amet mi at arcu viverra eleifend. Fusce sodales bibendum enim at pharetra. Vivamus consequat risus orci, id egestas urna fermentum eu. Aenean imperdiet mauris id ex egestas, et porta est ultricies.

Vestibulum mattis tellus tincidunt, consectetur lacus id, rutrum felis. Aliquam justo tortor, fermentum non ultricies eu, accumsan ultrices justo. Duis vel feugiat arcu. Phasellus imperdiet hendrerit sem in rhoncus. Ut aliquet, nibh non vestibulum auctor, elit odio mattis sem, sit amet hendrerit orci lectus vitae risus. Class aptent taciti sociosqu ad litora torquent per conubia nostra, per inceptos himenaeos. Donec sagittis, diam vel convallis suscipit, orci urna sagittis eros, quis volutpat felis neque non mi. Nullam sed viverra lectus. Interdum et malesuada fames ac ante ipsum primis in faucibus. Cras blandit laoreet nibh, eu pharetra tortor. Phasellus vehicula elit ac mi pulvinar feugiat. Vestibulum ac eleifend eros. Integer tincidunt ullamcorper dui. Quisque dictum nibh nec ultricies feugiat.

Sed scelerisque tellus felis, in scelerisque felis efficitur ut. Donec ex magna, ultricies vitae rutrum id, maximus non sapien. Curabitur nibh elit, laoreet sed egestas rhoncus, congue sit amet purus. Suspendisse a tempus est. Nullam eget blandit arcu. Pellentesque bibendum fringilla sem consectetur vehicula. Suspendisse vitae augue ut arcu egestas lobortis sit amet et risus. Morbi vulputate orci urna, et eleifend arcu maximus ac. Maecenas nulla mauris, scelerisque a libero sed, viverra sagittis velit. Morbi elementum nunc nec magna ullamcorper dapibus. Fusce dapibus porttitor ipsum, aliquam commodo metus placerat quis. Nullam molestie augue turpis, eget sodales ante suscipit in.

Donec feugiat eros cursus, tristique dui nec, lobortis dolor. Phasellus fermentum est ac ligula aliquam rutrum nec nec nisi. Pellentesque ultricies sem dolor, non sollicitudin lorem convallis vel. Nullam cursus sit amet magna vel gravida. Fusce condimentum et tellus sed venenatis. Duis non augue nunc.

 

Works Cited

Ebert, Roger. Review of An Inconvenient Truth, directed by Davis Guggenheim. rogerebert.com, 1 June 2006, http://www.rogerebert.com/reviews/an-inconvenient-truth-2006. Accessed 15 June 2016.

Gowdy, John. "Avoiding Self-organized Extinction: Toward a Co-evolutionary Economics of Sustainability." International Journal of Sustainable Development and World Ecology, vol. 14, no. 1, 2007, pp. 27-36.

An Inconvenient Truth. Directed by Davis Guggenheim, performances by Al Gore and Billy West, Paramount, 2006.

Milken, Michael, et al. "On Global Warming and Financial Imbalances." New Perspectives Quarterly, vol. 23, no. 4, 2006, p. 63.

No More. Public service announcement ad, with Mariska Hargitay. 2018. Joyful Heart Foundation, www.joyfulheartfoundation.org/programs/education/no-more/psa-campaign/no-more-excuses-video-and-print-series. Accessed 20 Sept. 2018.

Nordhaus, William D. "After Kyoto: Alternative Mechanisms to Control Global Warming." American Economic Review, vol. 96, no. 2, 2006, pp. 31-34.

---. "Global Warming Economics." Science, vol. 294, no. 5545, 9 Nov. 2001, pp. 1283-84, DOI: 10.1126/science.1065007.

 

 I made a lot of changes in this essay. Research for the project was tricky, and it was stressful trying to find credible sources. I found comfort in using the UA-PTC database; however, they didn’t have much for me. I felt the most successful with my dialectic thinking between Kirp and Dweck. Proofreading wasn’t bad at all. I only had to make a few corrections. During peer review, a classmate gave me some very important information that I had completely left out. I felt good about adding that information, and I felt great about turning in this essay. I hope you enjoy it.

Tryout

 I made a lot of changes in this essay. Research for the project was tricky, and it was stressful trying to find credible sources. I found comfort in using the UA-PTC database; however, they didn’t have much for me. I felt the most successful with my dialectic thinking between Kirp and Dweck. Proofreading wasn’t bad at all. I only had to make a few corrections. During peer review, a classmate gave me some very important information that I had completely left out. I felt good about adding that information, and I felt great about turning in this essay. I hope you enjoy it.

Rhetorical Analysis of an Ad

 

I made a lot of changes in this essay. Research for the project was tricky, and it was stressful trying to find credible sources. I found comfort in using the UA-PTC database; however, they didn’t have much for me. I felt the most successful with my dialectic thinking between Kirp and Dweck. Proofreading wasn’t bad at all. I only had to make a few corrections. During peer review, a classmate gave me some very important information that I had completely left out. I felt good about adding that information, and I felt great about turning in this essay. I hope you enjoy it.

Vaping

Have you ever saw a young group of teens hanging around and you see them blowing smoke? That is most likely vaping. CBS News states “5.2 million young users use e-cigarettes”. It is so common nowadays to see teens vaping. The U.S. Food and Drug Administration used what they know with generation Z and produced an ad about how vaping is bad for you. In this ad, they directed their attention towards young teens because of how common it is with their age to participate in vaping.

 The ad I choose, has a lot of details and emotions attached to it. The ad makes young people think something is seriously wrong with vaping. In the image it used was a slogan they created, it says “You may not be into chemistry, but if you vape, chemistry may be very into you.” In the image, it shows a type of chemical to show you how bad it is for you. It is a bright green/yellow to attract the audience’s eye. The size that the words are in is a big font. I assume they did that so it would be big enough to catch the readers attention. The Drug and Food Administration arranged the words to be above the picture so that they would see it, then their eyes would follow directly below and see the bright yellow/green image of the chemical. In smaller writing, they wrote, “Vaping can expose you to carcinogens like formaldehyde, and other toxic chemicals that can cause lung damage.” They said this because once they attracted the reader’s attention, they hoped they would read the fine print underneath to learn more about how bad vaping is bad for you.

 This ads claim is that vaping is bad for you. Telling you that chemicals is being put into you when doing so, supports the ad. Vape Danger says “In recent years, scientists have found various chemicals and substances in vape products that may be dangerous to human health. These include flavoring chemicals like diacetyl, heavy metal particles, compounds like formaldehyde, and ultrafine particles.” These chemicals can be very harmful to ones body. Diacetyl is only harmful to the lungs. It does irreversible damage. It is linked to popcorn lungs, meaning vaping can hurt your lungs and make them look like popcorn. Vape Danger also states “Ultrafine particles are tiny clusters of matter found in the surrounding air, such as water droplets, dirt, and toxic chemicals emitted from vape products. Ultrafine particles are created as the vape device heats up. If inhaled, ultrafine particles can enter the lungs and even the bloodstream. From there, these particles can harm the lungs and heart.” The chemicals vaping puts into you is no joke. It can be very harmful to your body and it can affect your body very negatively and will be long term.

 The audience the Food and Drug Administration targeted was Gen Z. I believe they choose them because of how easy it is for them to get ahold of it and start vaping. For example, when I was in high school, I cannot even tell you how many older kids offered to get me a vape or some type of nicotine. I was always a good kid, so I never even knew what a vape was until my aunt started doing it to get herself off of cigarettes. I think Gen Z is more likely to start vaping because they are more attracted to it. I believe some people do it just because they think it is cool. Little do they know that it is slowly killing them. I think that Generation Z is an easy target to vaping so they thought they would be an easy target to persuade to stop vaping because it is bad for them.

 The setting of the ad is not certain. But if I had to take a pick, I would say the ad is placed in a school. Being placed in a school, it would be likely that teens would see it around the halls and hopefully catch their attention and bring them to read it. I think putting up this ad at school would be a smart setting because it makes it easier for a teen to see this ad. If it were placed at a different setting. I don’t think they would see it. For example, if they were out with their friends at the movies and it was on the wall outside, they honestly would not look at it. They would not even care to glance over at it. I believe the setting they choose was a good place for it.

 

 

 Work Cited

https://www.vapedanger.com/health-risks/toxic-chemicals/#:~:text=In%20recent%20years%2C%20scientists%20have%20found%20various%20chemicals,currently%20investigating%20the%20long-term%20health%20effects%20of%20vaping.

 

https://www.cbsnews.com/news/teen-vaping-statistics-over-5-million-youths-estimated-to-be-vaping-in-the-us-researchers-say/#:~:text=Over%205%20million%20children%20and%20teens%20are%20vaping,year.%20That%20amounts%20to%205.3%20million%20young%20users%2C

 

 

 

I.                     Talk about smoking in twenty first century and how it has changed but that it is still a problem. Thesis Statement: The Anti-Smoking Print Ad is effective because it makes parents and older siblings second guess about smoking around their kids or siblings -Talk about how ads use persuasion to get the consumers to buy or think a certain way.

II.                   Second Paragraph: Give a description of the ad. Talk about the background and what the box of crayons means!

III.                 Third Paragraph: Talk about the words and how it may affect people who sees this ad.

IV.                Fourth Paragraph: Give a background on parents/older siblings smoking around kids.

V.                  Fifth Paragraph: Talk about what the ad suggests.

VI.                Sixth Paragraph: Who the ad targets and how does it manipulate the consumers into this idea.

VII.               Conclusion: Gather all my information throughout the essay and restate my ideas/facts.

Here is the ad:

Image of Batman slapping Robin meme.